Despite this story being only 55 pages, it needs a LOT of work to ... work. Honestly, it's incredibly repetitive, hasn't been edited well for flow or consistency, and really just falls flat. Which makes me sad, because I wanted to enjoy it. The writing is decent, but it should have had several rounds of beta reading and/or editing to clean up the mess, and for these reasons, despite the promise of a sweet, emotional, and decent story, I can't recommend it.
Did she go to his door for help, or did he find her "trespassing" on his mountain (Despite the fact her car broke down on the road....?)? Did he go to fix her car, or did they just sit down to have a conversation? When did he decide to give her a ride up the mountain? Did they not check the weather before they left? She was moving there but hadn't repaired for the weather? Was she miles away, or were they neighbors? Was it a thunderstorm or a blizzard? Were they in his home cabin, or a hunting cabin miles away? Did she plan to move there, or was it a sudden impulsive decision and she really decided to move there after she got the D from Banner?? Where were all these supposed, long, heartfelt conversations where they discussed his deep, dark, emotional turmoil that was keeping him from admitting his feelings? How could she have been waiting soooooooo long for him to admit his feelings when this all happened in the course of 2(ish) days?? Was the baby born years later, or "just a few months"?
Ordinarily, I wouldn't include any of these criticisms in my review because I would want people to form their own opinions on the story, but I had to go back several times to make sure I hadn't somehow switched stories, and I really, sincerely hope that this problem is because I was given an ARC, and that by the time it's published maybe these things will have been resolved, but I can only review the story I was given, and this needs a lot of work.
I received a free copy of this book via Booksprout and am voluntarily leaving a review.
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